Jealousy Kills ~ Friday Fictioneers

Friday Fictioneers prompt for 28 March 2014.

What is Friday Fictioneers? Rochelle presents a challenge to write a one hundred word story that has a beginning, middle and end, based upon a picture that she provides on her blog.

Here is today’s picture prompt (below).

Jealousy Kills

Word Count: 100

Genre: Fiction

Friday Fictioneers Prompt for 28 March 2014

Friday Fictioneers Prompt for 28 March 2014

The girl, who wasn’t really a girl anymore, walked rapidly toward the edge of the green woods; searching the gathering dusk for a glimpse of her tall, dark-haired future.

The boy, who wasn’t really a boy anymore, watched her through the veil of green, waiting in happy impatience, car keys and a ring, quietly jingling in his pocket.

The girl, who wasn’t really in her right mind anymore, stepped from behind the boy. Red hair in tangles, blue eyes crazed.

Too late, the green-eyed girl saw the gun blaze and watched in horror as her lover crumpled to the mossy dirt.

~ kei

27 March 2014

27 thoughts on “Jealousy Kills ~ Friday Fictioneers

    • Thank you so much Patty! I’m so touched that you would think of me, smiles. This pretty much makes my week!
      Hope your day is wonderful and sending big hugs your way K~xx


    • You are absolutely right! The blue-eyed girl with the gun mentioned in the third stanza and the green-eyed girl mentioned in the last stanza. Thank you so much for stopping by to read, much appreciated. ~ kei


  1. The ending was a total surprise! Very well written, great use of language and rhythm…a kind of prose poem. Really beautiful.

    Just one itty-bitty typo, I think, in the first paragraph: “the edge [of] the green” seems to be missing the word “of.”


    • LOL! Yes, the importance of commas and hyphens can never be underestimated, Let’s eat Grandpa Let’s eat, Grandpa. Those darn “slugs” though are always messing things up 🙂 Thank you so much for stopping in to read. ~ kei


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